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Military history of the Russian Empire[edit]

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So this is a long-term pet project of mine. It's only half done so far, so of course the review would only scope up to the last completed section, prelude to the Seven Years' War. This is my first significant foray into the area of military history, so I would love an expert review in particular. And a copyright of course. Along with all the usual reviewing that goes into a PR =) ResMar 23:59, 26 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this one, just wait a few hours. Buggie111 (talk) 00:10, 27 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Alright, first things first:
  • describe your boundary line (i.e. Why not Mihail Romonov's army etc.)
All of the references I've read have referred to Imperial Russia beginning under Peter the Great. More closely, it was he who declared a "Russian Empire" after the Great Northern War.
I've added a new section at the beginning of the article addressing these concerns. ResMar 22:41, 8 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Lead should be longer
I haven't gotten to it yet—can't write a good lead without writing the topic first! ResMar 01:48, 28 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Info on each emperor's military interests and the way they were chsoen to suceed their prdecessor seems way to much IMO. Just a sentance or two at the end of oen section aobut such and such's death. Buggie111 (talk) 00:59, 28 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Their military interest are really important, I think. The way I wrote this article I aimed to give a clear, if concise, view of each ruler, generally a paragraph or less on their succession. Otherwise there would be no context of what is going on. ResMar 01:48, 28 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I think the background material is concise, as I kept it to at most a paragraph, and informative, as it is important to the understand each ruler's background to understand what and why they were doing with their big shtick. ResMar 22:41, 8 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • I"ll help with Russian sources, if you intend to take this further.
I have another book on hold in the library, keep forgetting to fetch it. ResMar 01:48, 28 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I have it out, A History of Russia by Jessie D. Clarkson, dated 1964. Height of the Cold War! Will be interesting to see how perspectives have shifted from then. ResMar 22:41, 8 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Separate decembrists revolt from Napoleon, 13 years of difference.
Haven't gotten there yet =). ResMar 01:48, 28 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

All for know, Buggie111 (talk) 00:59, 28 October 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Still reviewing? :/ ResMar 00:11, 4 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Yeah, got sidetracked, sorry. Tommorrow evening should contain a plethora of suggestions. Buggie111 (talk) 00:15, 4 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

K, section two:

  • Need cites for Peter III and onward
See below. ResMar 02:53, 5 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Napoleonic section needs to have sub-headers (I presume the see also sections are your dividing lines)
See below. ResMar 02:53, 5 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Basically I haven't gotten to there yet. ResMar 22:41, 8 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Check for grammar/spelling mistakes (Anna I died autmn 1740). I apologize for my laziness of fixing, but I'm rather hurried now.
=) ResMar 02:53, 5 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I looked over it again, but I only caught one error...it needs a ce, that should catch stuff. ResMar 22:53, 8 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • 1735-39 Russo-Turkish war pic needs to be moved to the side of the article
Is that the imagemap? I'd rather it stay in the center, it squishes on smaller screens. ResMar 02:53, 5 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Alts for images (not requiered, bu preferred)
Those are a pain in the butt and I'd rather not deal with them, sorry. ResMar 02:53, 5 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • Introduce the Russian Empire, not just start on about Peter the Great out of the blue.
Granted, I'll add something in later. ResMar 02:53, 5 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Done, new section before Peter. ResMar 22:53, 8 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • That's it for now, ping me when you ahve the remainder done and I'll do a check of that and a line by line check of the entrie article. Buggie111 (talk) 23:13, 4 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Again, everything past the Seven Years' War remains unwritten, yet. ResMar 02:53, 5 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Done. ResMar 22:53, 8 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
You there? ResMar 22:30, 14 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
=| ResMar 21:21, 19 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Scholarship essays, sorry. This time tommorrow I'll be done. Buggie111 (talk) 02:46, 20 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Last thing, then Buggie out:

  • Unbold Russian empire and battle of Narva in the text, don't see a reason to keep it like that. Buggie111 (talk) 19:15, 20 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]
...Nothing happened... ResMar 17:34, 26 November 2011 (UTC)[reply]