Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Voalavo gymnocaudus/archive1
- The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.
The article was promoted by Karanacs 03:31, 9 June 2011 [1].
Voalavo gymnocaudus[edit]
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This is a small Malagasy rodent that was discovered only a few decades ago. The article was GA-reviewed by Rcej not too long ago and is part of a current good topic candidate. I'm looking forward to your reviews. Ucucha 07:06, 27 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Source review - spotchecks not done. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:41, 27 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Publisher for Garbutt?
Images - source link for File:World_map_pol_2005_v02.svg (one of the root files for the map you use) is dead. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:41, 27 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Support [from RJH]—Overall I found no major issues and it seems to satisfy the FA criteria, although an image of the critter would be nice. Here are a few nit-picks that I hope you will address:
It's a bit parenthesis-heavy in places. Some of those could be changed to comma pairs or otherwise modified. For example: "...but (as usual in nesomyines) contain..." => "...but, as usual in nesomyines, contain...""Meanwhile, in 1999..." 'Meanwhile' is additive and redundant."Later studies found..." When? (See WP:DATED)."...cytochrome b sequences..." See WP:JARGON.Is there anything on predation of this species? The expected lifespan?- I'm afraid not. I guess galidiines would eat it and it probably won't get older than one or two years in the wild. Ucucha 17:41, 27 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- You could put the "Literature cited" section content between {{refbegin|colwidth=30em}} and {{refend}} templates to make the format consistent with the references.
Thank you. Regards, RJH (talk) 17:26, 27 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments [from Juliancolton]
- at 1250 to 1950 m (4100 to 6400 ft) altitude - The lead flows extremely well, except for this small bit, which is pretty stark and abrupt I think. I would suggest changing it to "at an altitude of...", but it's your call.
- I'd like to see a brief mention of the confusion between the species and the two Eliurus species in the lead, if it's possible. It seems like an important part of the rodent's taxonomic history.
- Voalavo gymnocaudus lacks a distinct tuft of hairs at the tail tip. - This feels a little redundant when you noted the same thing in the paragraph above it. Maybe it could be reworked or incorporated into another sentence to make it seem less redundant as a standalone blurb?
Very good article otherwise. Just a couple things that jumped out at me, but I'm more than happy to support after these are addressed. Nicely done! Juliancolton (talk) 02:16, 30 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Support - Looks good. Excellent work as usual. Juliancolton (talk) 13:54, 30 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Support I couldn't even see any nitpicks with this one Jimfbleak - talk to me? 17:01, 31 May 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Support
Comments- I'll jot some notes below: Casliber (talk · contribs) 08:42, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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Morphological differences between the two are subtle but consistent, and the cytochrome b sequences of the two species differ by about 10%- this has nothing to let the lay reader know whether this is a large or little number - how divergent this is. A sentence or two to place this in context would be very helpful. DNA sequence data suggests it may be more closely related to Eliurus grandidieri than to other species of the closely related genus Eliurus.- in lead, don't you mean " DNA sequence data suggests it may be more closely related to Eliurus grandidieri than the latter species is to other species of the closely related genus Eliurus." ?
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Conclude - nice and ship-shape - was reduced to nitpicking...Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:21, 3 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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