Talk:Hananu Revolt/GA1
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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 23:02, 29 February 2016 (UTC)
Hi, I'll review this article. FunkMonk (talk) 23:02, 29 February 2016 (UTC)
- I'm not sure, but I'm thinking a map might be better in the infobox than a photo of the man?
- "Meanwhile, France claimed special interests in Syria" I think Sykes-Picot could be mentioned here.
- "where they faced a revolt led by Saleh al-Ali" Link to Alawite Revolt of 1919?
- "and its hinterland within the Ottoman state." But that state didn't exist by this time?
- "access to Aleppo's Anatolian hinterland" I think you could link Anatolian.
- "which was predominantly Turkish" In what sense do you mean here? I see you link to Turkish people, but I assume you mean the Turkish state as well? I think it could be clarified a bit...
- "had Turkic, Kurdish and Circassian lineage." Maybe say "where of ... descent" or some such?
- "which had been the administrative center of its own province" I'd add "under the Ottomans" or similar, and perhaps not hide the vilayet name in an easter-egg link.
- The Atatürk image could need some source info or replacement.
- Damn, that's too bad since the timing of the image (1921) and his military dress aptly fit into the context of the article. I'll try to locate a source for it, but will replace it if I can't find one. I'll also try to find a source for the deleted Hananu image. Al Ameer (talk) 21:34, 19 March 2016 (UTC)
- The Fathallah Saqqal seems to be stretched horizontally, which looks weird.
- "called ′iṣābāt" Meaning?
- "declared the Arab Kingdom of Syria over the region of Syria in March 1920" Not sure what this means. They declared it as?
- "sympathetic of Ottoman rule" Sympathetic to?
- "a ′iṣābā" An?
- "known as mujahidin" Give the meaning.
- That was quick, I'll review the rest of the article later today. How's the last work going over at Tanyus Shahin, by the way? FunkMonk (talk) 21:38, 19 March 2016 (UTC)
- "coincided with Turkish revolts against the French military" Anything to link to?
Revised. Al Ameer (talk) 17:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
- " Hananu to decided to attack" Decided to?
- "Hananu also co-founded the Arab Club in Aleppo" During the fighting?
- "chief of whom was Jamil Ibrahim Pasha" Link pasha?
- I don't know if I want to just link part of his name, I'll try to start an article on him, even if just a stub. Al Ameer (talk) 17:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
- Ok, see Jamil Ibrahim Pasha - couldn't find much biographical info about him, other than what the Khoury source provided. Al Ameer (talk) 20:52, 22 March 2016 (UTC)
- I don't know if I want to just link part of his name, I'll try to start an article on him, even if just a stub. Al Ameer (talk) 17:44, 21 March 2016 (UTC)
- "Armenian refugees who had fled from their villages in Turkey," You could mention why.
- " and if the Franco-Turkish War had not ended." In extension to my earlier comment, seems weird this war is first linked all the way down here.
- "rebels known as mujahidin (fighters of holy struggle i.e. jihad)" Seems the explanation down here is now redundant.
- "or smuggled to the rebels Mauser rifles" Or smuggled Mauser rifles to the rebels?
- " feared this autonomy would ultimately lead to its annexation by Turkey" Perhaps mention this actually happened (you only do this in the intro)?
- Perhaps mention what happened to Hananu after these events, as he is so important to them?
- "referred to their revolts as part of the "general national movement of Western Aleppo"." Only stated in intro.
- "After early rebel victories, guerrilla operations stopped after" Double after seems repetitive...
- Perhaps the years this took place could be stated in the first paragraph of the intro?
- "established a quasi-state" Only mentioned as such in intro.
- perhaps mention in the intro that the Great Syrian Revolt followed?
- Yea, there's a couple more things like the "quasi-state" line and Hananu's post-revolt life. It looks like someone added a source for the Ataturk image, I'll upload a picture of Hananu later today. I found a great source about the revolt, but it's in French so I'll have to tinker with it later. Will finish the remaining issues today and/or tomorrow. --Al Ameer (talk) 21:34, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
- @FunkMonk: Ok, I added a picture of Hananu and added some info about his future in Syria following the revolt. The quasi-state thing is actually already mentioned in the body in the Rebel organization section: "At the height of the revolt, Hananu effectively created a quasi-independent state between Aleppo and the Mediterranean Sea." Let me know if I missed anything. --Al Ameer (talk) 20:22, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
- Yea, there's a couple more things like the "quasi-state" line and Hananu's post-revolt life. It looks like someone added a source for the Ataturk image, I'll upload a picture of Hananu later today. I found a great source about the revolt, but it's in French so I'll have to tinker with it later. Will finish the remaining issues today and/or tomorrow. --Al Ameer (talk) 21:34, 23 March 2016 (UTC)